Mr.+Noble+Letter

Max Petsef Room 23 Fairfield Intermediate 261 Clarkin Road

Mr. Noble Fairfield Intermediate Chartwell Hamilton

Dear Mr. Noble,

My Name is Max Petsef, year 8 Class Counsellor of Room 23, a laptop class. __I’m (I am)__ not much of a sports fan, but __it’s__ great fun when our class plays Capture The Flag, because we almost always win. My hobbies always involve electronics, for __instincts (instance)__, a great day for me would be sitting alone in my lounge with the lights off and curtains pulled playing games on my Playstation 3 for the whole day.

Fairfield Intermediate has put me through a lot of experiences, some good, and some are bad. In this paragraph, most people talk about how great camp was. I am going to do the opposite. The last two camps at Fairfield Intermediate School I have hated. The long boring walks, the sleepless nights, the “not very good” food, and nothing to look forward to at the end of the day. Even though I am a year 8, I know quite a lot of year 7 students that hated their camp, so I’m hoping that it will become optional for students to go to camp, not just if their parents don’t have enough money.

For my learning, being in a laptop class and digital class last year has helped me heaps, because I love computers and electronics and work very well with them. Al s o, this year I have gone up two math groups and I am now in the highest. I am pleased with myself because maths has been at a low standard in my primary years.

I have always been great at reading, since whenever I’m not on my PS3, I’m reading. Since __I’m__ in the highest group in both maths and reading, I believe I am well on my way to my two years six months.

Yours Sincerely,

Max Petsef __//Miss Crawford - Well, Max, you have definitely expressed your opinions But I wonder if there are any other changes you would make, besides camp? Also, your paragraph about learning needs more information, some examples would be good. You need to go through and change your contractions to full words.//__